An inhibited sadness extending like frost. Too many blocky paragraphs, small type. They seem impenetrable, igloos stuffed with cotton, no way to get a worm into the ear. <\/p>\n
I read the essay on Jacob, Ponge, and Follain in Sentence<\/i>. I liked how it delineated the differences between the poets’ styles. I own a couple volumes of Ponge, including “Soap.” I went crazy when I first read it, it’s just SO obsessive. I wouldn’t mind picking up some Jacob. Follain didn’t grab me, too much this and that and everything else there. <\/p>\n
Meanwhile, still editing…. I’m reading this manuscript over and over and over. Tweaking something every time. Sometimes taking out a period, sometimes putting in a comma. I made one rearrangment in sequence today, but in general, I think the sequencing is pretty good. <\/p>\n
My temptation in changing words is to get too “literary.” The kiss of death. In general, the work is made of plain words, some arranged unexpectedly. I resorted to one quite blatant cliché in the most sexual part of the poem. I couldn’t help it. Any other simile would have evoked an “eeeuw” reaction. Maybe I’ll come up with a better word tomorrow. <\/p>\n
This work is not really like anything in the volumes I’ve been reading. I’m jittery about that. I’m trying to retain a very pure judgment about it. I mean, do I like it or not????<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"
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